Description: Im trying to find myself again and this is what I kind of feel right now if this was not how I felt I wouldnt have written anything at all... so please read and comment and stare a little into my current train of thought
Hey! Nice to see you are writing! Even though this is a sad poem, it is still expressing your feelings which is wonderful. Even in the toughest of times, there is always tomorrow. There is always a brighter side, you just have to find it. When life kicks you in the ass you just gotta kick back...that is all there is to it. Nothing lasts forever, even the tough times, and like everything else, this too shall pass. You need to try to look past this situation and see the world around you in a positive way. The world is there for you to take hold of. Be strong and continue to fight. We all go through these tough times...it is what makes you stronger. Take care of yourself and keep writing! Take care.
Wow.. I wrote a poem a lot like this a couple of days ago.. it was called 'Devoid'. Sheesh, and they're saying the same thing- ultimate depression. Have you noticed how all the depressed words start with 'd'? I mean, there's damned, depressed, devoid, drained, dead, deserted.. I could go on. Wow. Whoever invented all these words was either really stupid or extremely cryptical, making all these downing words start with a 'd'. Hmm.
the population as a whole has a strong degree of predictability. As for the younger writers, putting their arguments against whoever or whatever they have emotional conflict with via first person freeverse(or simple rhymes) is more of a venting method(lots of 'pity me' poems). Putting the thoughts into words will create a stronger simplification of the problem at hand so that they can at least feel in control. Emotions can be manifested into static words for easier 'management'. Unfortunately many of the younger ones don't care to rewrite or try to add depth to their poem. They just use it as a method of directly voicing(spoon feeding) their thoughts to the reader without giving much to rhetoric. Personalizing the poem with personality, tone, imagery, etc- rhetoric, and indirectly stating the point gives the readers something(make their own conclusions/connections) to ponder about and thus give a stronger connection to the reader.
I have a hard time comming up with something for you! I am sure that you know what you are talking about... A certain situation... but I just don't get it... maybe you could give me some insight.
Submission Name: Drained
