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    dots Submission Name: A Frosty Haikudots

    Author: honus
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 90/96/32
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Comedy
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    dotsA Frosty Haikudots

    Think of the poet
    who froze to death in the woods
    contemplating paths

    Submitted on 2005-10-31 19:37:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I always thought it was difficult to write haikus, and I enjoyed this one. I have no gripes for you because this was a pretty coool haiku! :) Good write!
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by evey36 | [ Reply to This ]

    This is a nice refreshing little write. I just love haiku. I love the way nature grasp at you in a haiku. This one is kix. Boy, I bet he did a lot of contemplating. Don't you think?hahaha Take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow - very interesting. It's witty and intertaining, but with a useful message beneath it. What I get from it is that sometimes you need to take action, and it's harmful to over-contemplate a situation.

    A random thought - have you ever written an epigram? It seems like you would be good at that.
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Starless Knight | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee! This is a very good haiku! Not only have you included nature with the elements but you speak of a very famous poet and the format fits perfectly. Your word choice is excellent and this is really cool. haha! I appreciate haikus for they say lots in such few words when they are written well and this one is definitely a good one! Very good! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I get this haiku... in a kind of confused to know where will you go kind of way but I still get it somehow... It was a nice haiku made me thing of some of the situations I have been in when I do not know what would be the best choice... made me laugh at myself for a while then I was like this is so true... sometimes people take too long to make their decision and in the end they find that they will not go anywhere with it... so yeah nice little haiku I dig it

    Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      Alia has spoiled everyone's chance to be clever and get your poem...cool title but probably too big a clue....I was just reading that poem the other day and thought it was ok but was actually disappointed because of the references I've heard about it over the years...it wasn't some life changing experience

    5/7/5 all looks good to me and this poem was clever in the way you related it to 'frosty' and for the picture of a great mind at work being too stupid to get up and go home/inside....pretty good value for money Enjoyed DB
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think I have ... wait never mind. Yeah, I have read Robert Frost. I was about to say I hadn't and I still understood it but... well you get the picture

    I agree with Storm of Bliss, it did bring a smile to my face when I read this. I get his picture of a poet standing there with his hand under his chin in a thinking position just frozen there...

    just my thoughts

    I always find Haikus worth high-fives, its always more of a challenge to get the whole 5-7-5 syllable bit right. good job! (If I had ice cream, which I don't (sadly), I would give you some for the syllable-ness)

    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by MystMaker | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Nice thought.. reminds me lots of the poem "The Road Less Taken", or whatever, by Robert Frost. You probably thought of him, too, judging by your title, "A Frosty Haiku".. Hmm. And now, I've got to run... but still. Interesting topic. Hah, hit ME back with a comment!

    -T o x i c R o s e
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Toxic Rose | [ Reply to This ]

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