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    dots Submission Name: Angeldots
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    Author: zhi wei
    ASL Info:    17, Male, Malaysia.
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 171/203/53
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAngeldots
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    Dear angel,
    To where
    has that golden glimmer of yours gone?
    Have failed attempts in flight
    Made that pleasing smile withdrawn?
    Let not these plummets of the past
    fetter your feathered dreams,
    for they are but dark hours
    before greetings
    from a new dawn.

    Trust that I am no stranger
    to the yearning inside your soul;
    To fly, to watch the world;
    Afar.
    Trust that you are indeed fashioned
    to soar;
    In majestic beauty
    Of the angel that you are.

    I understand
    that mere words uttered or written
    can never elevate you
    to those heights;
    Why, perhaps you feel
    this is just irrational;
    Seeing I am not you,
    Yet I speak of these insights.

    Dear angel, do keep in mind
    That the wishes
    held within your heart
    have not at all been hollow;
    For hope
    is the only certainty
    that fills the emptiness of tomorrow.




    Submitted on 2005-11-01 05:30:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lee:

    My heart felt the warmth of your words and the sincerity in a long friendship.

    I hope that your friend will appreciate this as much as we do in EliteSkills.com. May this bring her joy on her birthday. Love Saby~*~
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by CaramelCandy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is incredibly sweet and also very poignant.

    I love to read poems that people write for/about their friends, because it shows that the writer is compassionate and very caring towards those around them. Just reading this, I felt MY spirits being lifted because it was just so beautiful. Simply put, I loved the poem so much that I am going to add it to my favorites. Great job. ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~Tayla~
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi,
    This is such a beautiful piece. It brought tears.
    You two share a very special friendship. I hope as years pass the friendship will continue to be strong. I know she will love this poem. A very well written special piece. You take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful poem, charged with feeling and love for your friend. She will be able to percieve that and she will savour every word again and again. It is inspirational and your images are beautiful.
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Speacenik | [ Reply to This ]
      Your friend is going to be touched by your poem, as was I. It's a beautifully personal piece, written in a way that screams with sincerity. Don't be too suprised if she bursts into tears and reads it every day. If it doesn't lift her spirits, it will most certainly show her that there are people that really care for her. Nice one!
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem for your friend. I am sure she would love reading this and feel fortunate that you care about her feelings so. I love the last stanza of this. Hope is indeed something we all need to hold onto. It brings possibilities back into our lives. It gives you the belief that all is not as bad as it seems and brighter days are yet to come. This is a very inspiring poem, well written and expressed. I am sure she will feel better to know you care for her so. Lovely! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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