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    dots Submission Name: Swinging Highdots
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    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSwinging Highdots
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    As a child I loved to swing
    high into the sky,
    pretending I could fly.

    Soaring through the clouds
    happy and free.
    Not having to be
    anyone but me.

    No one to tell me,
    you canít do that!
    Youíre too fat!
    Oh, what a brat !
    No, not that hat!
    Not a calico cat!

    Now time has gone by,
    and itís plain to see,
    We canít always be
    just you and me.

    But once again,
    Before I die.
    swinging high,
    Iím going to be
    Just I!












    Submitted on 2005-11-01 09:45:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol! This is great. The child never dies in each of us!
    | Posted on 2011-01-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very refreshing, simple but sweet. i really like the tone behind the piece, the simplicity of it is quite alluring. good write.

    Kuddos,
    Jermaine.
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      this was peaceful you no every spingtime me and my lifes companion go for our morning cofe and a swing ride just once for about an hour
    on the first day of spring
    geat post and thanx for you comments
    they are much appreciated
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice start and finish! I would take out the third stanza and use that space to relate the first two with the last two.

    The flow is good, and it keeps your attention.

    Monica
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]


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