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    dots Submission Name: Woman with dark hair and a bandots
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    Author: papalegba
    ASL Info:    45/male/schenectady ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 52/42/28
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       the full title is: woman with dark hair and a bandana atop her head.


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    dotsWoman with dark hair and a bandots
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    there was a woman down at the river
    gazing ever so at the dark water
    playing her guitar with a mournful song
    with bat's and u.s cargo planes bound for war
    going round her head
    she takes a brake for a phone call then
    takes a slient pause before restarting
    thinking of the conversation and
    other thoughts of the day
    the sky was dark as the moon was in it's quater
    i told her she had a beautiful voice
    as she said i'm going to be at the moon and river
    i thought how nice
    being at the river with the moon at night
    as i left her another cargo plane bound for war flew
    over head
    the bat's they as well
    the mournful song will in time
    be a forgotten memorie
    and for the river and the bats...no one knows
    but we will hope that the cargo planes bound for war
    will one day cease
    as i will remember that
    there was a woman down at the river




    Submitted on 2005-11-01 11:07:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A beautiful, stunning poem. I am with bama girl and think it sounded like a woman mourning for her loved one who is away at war. I couldn't get then imagery and wording out of my head. this is definitely a fave!
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      A beautiful poem! Sounded as if the woman was mourning for one off in war and this was brought out in her music. Just guessing here
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]


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