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    dots Submission Name: There's Something Inside Medots
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    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 309
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       It was just crossing my mind, the thought of someone who seems so happy having an unlikely suicide. It's just a crazy topic.


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    She looks so surprised when she sees him walking in,
    And I wonder how she feels so alone,
    When he can wrap his arms around her so tight,
    And her tiny body seems afraid.
    She walks away with no feelings,
    But somehow it doesn’t show,
    She looks so blushed of his presence,
    yet her body is filled with hatred.
    I’ve seen her alone sitting on the stairs,
    Scanning her arms and her bones,
    No eyes can see how many scars I could see,
    By glancing by her that evening.
    And I still can’t imagine,
    How many times I’ve seen them kiss,
    It seems like love in my eyes,
    But for her it seems like she’s to say goodbye…forever.
    She’s just too beautiful for pictures,
    And much to sweet for hugs,
    But most of all she was too bare to dream of,
    and so much more than what she thought.
    I kind of still wish I could have been there,
    Always surrounded by love,
    Still inside she would often wonder,
    The whispers that surrounded her.
    I still wonder around her bedroom sometimes,
    Thinking of things I could have said,
    But for one reason or another I kept quiet,
    I just know I’ll think of something someday.
    So alone on her lifeless bed I say softly,
    A little prayer I’ll yell to her star,
    And even though I believe she can hear me,
    I would rather her be here to help.
    So next time I look at her picture,
    I won’t think of things I could say,
    But rather I’ll hold on to a little piece of her heart,
    And maybe one day her suicide won’t cross this pain again.
    I think I would have liked it though,
    Being surrounded by her pain, her hatred, her thoughts,
    Because once again I’ve proved myself wrong,
    When everything just looked so right.




    Submitted on 2005-11-01 15:23:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate to this in ways...and i think you have summed up beautifully the way some do feel and never let it show...when it gets to that point for people...well i know it has for myself...it can be the time when they pretend the most...the best...not to let anyone know their plans because they are so set on carrying them through...people have believed i was fine..happy etc...when inside the pain is eating at me and the numbness/darkness is taking over...


    She looks so surprised when she sees him walking in,
    And I wonder how she feels so alone,
    When he can wrap his arms around her so tight,
    And her tiny body seems afraid.
    She walks away with no feelings,
    But somehow it doesn’t show,
    She looks so blushed of his presence,
    yet her body is filled with hatred.


    that part is so apt...and so hard for people who have not been there to understand...but you have captured it well...



    i liked this...it is a v.good write...well done!
    | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      A very deep and Moving write
    You captured true undying love with this one
    To me I pictured this as a Mother remembering her Daughter
    Very well written
    With deep emotion surronding this piece
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch
    Its been awhile since ive heard from you
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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