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    dots Submission Name: Interlude (Resubmit)dots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       I'm in such a poetic mood today with the autumunal weather but I'm also busy, busy at work.
    I try to go back to earlier pieces and pause for inner-reflection.

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    dotsInterlude (Resubmit)dots


    In sweet
    smiling slumber
    the mountain
    of the wind
    which whisphered
    to the clouds
    adrift to
    cloak the
    in a veil

    Submitted on 2005-11-02 10:44:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love the title.. it fits so well with the rest of the write. You have a beautiful, warming, and romantic nature image here. You've given the mountain, the wind, the clouds, a sort of "human" effect... and somehow made the icy snow seem warm and welcoming as well.

    Wonderful work!!
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds as if the mountain is settling for its long winter nap, the snow is its blanket of comfort through the long winter months ahead. Beautiful nature poem!
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely prose. Wonderful descriptions and I really like how you use nature as if it were alive like us, communicating to each other in their own way. A very short, yet very effective style here adds to the magic of nature and it kinda reads like it belongs in a peppermint patty ad. Haha! It gives the reader that cool refreshing feeling as it is read. This is really well written. A pleasure to read. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing better than clear and crisp lines of communication. I hope the mountain had his winter coat on and was wearing a cap in readiness for the snowfall. As usual, very descriptive and good.
    | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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