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    dots Submission Name: Trippeddots
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    Author: kaoriliveshere
    ASL Info:    19/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 5/10/10
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       It is talking about tripping the in hallway of high school infront of everyone. It also talks about the embrassment too.


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    dotsTrippeddots
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    I wish I could easily glide
    All the way across the sky.
    Out of this planet would be fine
    As long as it was out of my mind.
    Right now I canít help me-
    The way my feelings hurt inside.
    Everyoneís acid tonic voices I hear
    Is the thing thatís in my broken heart.
    All your chilly eyes looking down on me
    Is what eats me inside and out.
    Just knowing that all you are there
    Is what keeps my ice figure right here.
    Sitting on the ground to hide,
    I try to deny the hard fact.
    I have just tripped over my feet
    Across the big, beautiful hallway.




    Submitted on 2005-11-02 13:46:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey I can relate to this one... I too fell a couple times in High School.. oh yes..was embarrassing..once it happened in the lunch room and yes people do slip on banana peels..just ask me lol... The second time I fell off the bus...The driver looked down and said are you ok... I picked myself up and said yes.. feeling really stupid... Very nice write...Thank you for sharing... Desi
    | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]


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