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    dots Submission Name: Relationshipsdots
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    Author: kaoriliveshere
    ASL Info:    19/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 5/10/10
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1415
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 314



    Description:
       Every line decribe a different emotion of a relationship.

    Love
    Happiness
    wish
    Lust
    Hate
    mad
    Miss
    sad


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    dotsRelationshipsdots
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    The emotional overdose of
    A sunny glow with those that
    Fill in the holes a companying the dark.
    The physical addiction
    Working over time to get attention
    When nothing seems to go to the right.
    The emptiness fills up the room
    Making the space empty and full.




    Submitted on 2005-11-02 13:58:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love how you paged through the emotions. It's defiantely a good perspective on everything most people feel in any sort of relationship. I wouldn't have guessed that a piece of work in which every line described a different feeling, would've gone so well, but, personally, I really liked the way this was written.
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by miss__smiles | [ Reply to This ]


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