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    Author: SouthrnQT
    ASL Info:    24/ Female/ Florida
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 290/271/31
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    His fortress, his covenant
    Bound by the passion that glues us
    Keeps us
    Entwined

    Eternally breathless
    His words, etched inside this fiery vessel
    Scorched within my veins
    Tantalizing scripture traced eloquently against my skin

    Anticipation flickers in the candlelight
    Sultry whispers, caressing hands
    Prayer-filled promises
    Bathed in his life, his being


    Satisfied hunger
    Quenching his infinite thirst....

    Inside me....




    Submitted on 2005-11-02 14:19:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice tribute here. Both touching and sexy. Nothing to nit & nothing I would change.

    Peace,

    Joe

    (And this dumb computer better not tell me I have to write more...)
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Trey is definitely a great person. You have seen that in him as have so many others. This dedication to him was beautiful. Through all that makeup and craziness lies a very sensitive person.

    This was wonderful.

    Alicia
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...i guess i'm not sure waht to think. i know thats not the best criticism but seriously, i'm not quite sure what this is supposed to be about necessarily. i understand it's about someone you love, but i feel as though it's very random and choppy, almost. it's definitely not bad or anything, you use some wonderful adjectives and portray love well, i just feel as though there's no rhyme or reason to it. (not that i want it to rhyme, cuz i actually dont care for rhyming poems much)
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by xvacantxskiesx | [ Reply to This ]
      doll face, this is amazing. your words envoke swirling and overpowering emotions and images and leave me overtaken. again, you've written something incredible, a testament to who you are.

    in awe,
    me
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was kind of strange, but in a very good way. I got a feeling of immense lust from your words, calculating a level of pleasured torment. Anticipation can really hurt sometimes, especially for a man. Just the thought of it makes me cringe a little. After reading this I think I am about to go find my girlfriend. Thank you for this beautiful reminder of how much I enjoy my girlfriend.

    Matt
    | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by crowded_mind | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful way to describe a woman leaning on her "lover" to do the best for both of them. I enjoyed the descriptive words that were used and the fact that you never said anything straight-forward. But I think it would have made more of an impact if it wouldn't have been so strong and so short.. I think it would benefit by knocking out some of the strong emotion that was giving so abrupt, by keeping the emotion strong, long and at a steady pace. That is a mere opinion and I will enjoy it either way. keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]


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