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    dots Submission Name: Bruisesdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This isn't autobiographical in any way. I was trying to break out of writer's block by writing something uncomfortable.


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    dotsBruisesdots
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    My thoughts beat me up
    more than you ever could:
    they paralyze me,
    for I replay your words
    in my head on an endless loop,
    but only the snide ones,
    for the kind ones are too few,
    and I doubt myself
    too much without your help,
    and without your meanness,
    I'd have a face and a soul
    free of bruises.





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      wow this is strong...even without your abuse i have little self-esteem...but at least i don't have the bruises...

    i don't need you to make me feel bad about myself...

    it is really tough to have no self-confidence...

    been there, done that...relate to this.

    and hate abusers...want an hour in a locked room with them.

    you expressed this so well that the reader feels the speaker's pain...and that is good stuff...cause you said in your description it was not autobiographical...but it has that feel...

    but then often my friends email me or call me and ask me if i am okay? obviously because they will read my poetry and take it literally..

    we play roles...and you did that with much intensity in this one.

    reading you is such a joy and inspiration.

    jacob

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    | Posted on 2011-09-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      it's darker than you're usual ones. but I like it.
    'And without your meanness
    I'd have a face and a soul
    Free of bruises'
    these words stick in my mind. great lines. I think you can write anything, it's always a good poem.
    | Posted on 2004-04-22 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      After reading this I just kind of sat here for a moment. I have lived this. You are damn straight that this is an uncomfortable thing to write about. Also, uncomfortable to read. But no regrets...glad I read it and even strangly glad I was forced to live it. It made me who I am and these days I happen to like who I am.

    Thank you for this one...Truly so.
    | Posted on 2004-04-22 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy--- I realte well to getting outside of your skin---a butterfly thing---transformation etc- this is a really thoughtful and provocayive write-----oppps ttyl kids on-line---Sorryyy Silver
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Again--sorry--one would think when one finally gets about 2-4 hours of time to herself--that she could be reckless and coment @ eliteskills.com--but NO---her kids and even grandchildren feel compelled to chat at 2.am in the morning---anyway--istarted to say...........
    Great poem Ms. Minimalist --Silver
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      this had a lot of emotion behind it, i can relate just a little bit, something similar to this happened to me a coupel of days ago, but the sweet wrods far surpassthe horrible ones, but it was a great write, the anology was good
    | Posted on 2004-04-24 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]


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