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    dots Submission Name: Youdots
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    Author: Ola
    ASL Info:    18/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 221/187/42
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 193
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 521



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    dotsYoudots
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    I sit here and marvel
    at the funny things you do
    When you don't know
    I'm watching, watching you

    The way you light up
    at the littlest things
    and the way your brow crinkles
    when you go a'wondering

    The way the wind whips
    your surfer-looking hair
    or the way you never
    you never seem to care

    All these and then more
    are just a few things
    that make me thank God
    for giving you to me.




    Submitted on 2005-11-02 21:39:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked the care-free feel of this write, It's a good time. It is short but it is the right length, it conveys all it needs to. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      What, that was very cute, ola. It's been a while since you shared some of your beauty with us. I was wondering if you were still alive! (j/k) Great Write though! I hope everything is going good for you. God bless, and keep honoring me with your presence!
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      The last part does rhyme. I thought this was really good. I thought that it was very thought out. And ussually when people ryme it sound like they were trying too hard but your just kinda flowed. I thought it was a really good write.


    Drea
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      aw u shouldve made the last part rhyme too ;),
    man i was searching for this guy as you were telling me what you noticed, this guy sounds like its easy to get interested, i love the line:
    "The way you light up
    at the littlest things"

    This poem is so cute 8-(|)
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Reva Laine | [ Reply to This ]



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