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    dots Submission Name: night watchdots

    Author: papalegba
    ASL Info:    45/male/schenectady ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 52/42/28
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsnight watchdots

    as i light a candle
    to brighten up my spirit
    there is a feeling
    being disconnected from
    the rest
    there is no walking together
    as before
    but a lonelyness that escapes words
    out in the cold
    frozen blood that no longer brings life
    a soul that has lost it's music
    where are all the people
    there is no one to listen
    what should i do
    they walk by with their blankets
    and throw fresh food in the dumpster
    when they know i am hungry
    they laugh at the dirt on my face
    and spit on my sores
    they say oh that bum should work
    but they do not think about
    my mental health
    they forgot about the walk of the christ
    what would happen if the tables were turned
    would they have a differnt outlook on life
    or the death of my spirit
    only the god of their belife would know the answer to that question
    as i light the candle for me to see the way
    i must also light the biggest candle for them
    so they can see themselves in the mirrior of
    self revalation as they go on the path
    to find their ture spirit and god's

    Submitted on 2005-11-03 14:48:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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