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    dots Submission Name: DEATH WATCH FOR MY PETdots
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    Author: dycrain
    ASL Info:    56/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    7.33 - 51/54/19
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Annie was a mixed breed dog, a dog rescued. Once she had some training, everyone wanted her. She saved me many times from harm. Our alpha dog, very very smart.
    As always, I am looking for a review that is honest. If this poem was published, would you stop to read it. If it was your poem, besides the name "Annie", what change would you make?


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    dotsDEATH WATCH FOR MY PETdots
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    Demanded constant care, given freely
    Euthenasia, peacefully released soul;you see
    Always, we know when it is time
    Time, to leave without pain, it's no crime
    How my heart aches, cause; grieving my loss

    We knew, it was now, her last sound a wail
    Alright baby, let go of this earthly tie you have
    Tidings, God will greet you now
    Cheerfully, run without pain, give a playful bow
    How my heart aches, cause; grieving my loss

    Faithfully, you gave unconditional love
    Occurred, that you will be in await above
    Release, my heart aches; cause grieving my loss

    Moisture, my cheeks wet, salty is its taste
    Yes, Annie, please scurry without haste

    Painlessly, you can again romp and play
    Euthenasia, peacefully, your release today
    Today, my heart aches, cause; grieving my loss




    Submitted on 2005-11-03 17:24:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is so lovely yet so very sad. I can totally relate to this poem. I love animals of all kinds and have a huge heart for them. My animals are like my children and when I lose one, it is like one of my children have died. It is devestatingly painful. I had two dogs and both lived long and full lives. One was 16 and the other 17 and I had to have them put to sleep. Fortunately they were far apart in age so when the 17 year old had to be put down the 16 year old was only 10 and so they werent close together. Benji was 17 and got to the point where he would lay down and not be able to stand himself back up again. I couldnt bare to see him suffer and it took a while to make the decision. I wished he would just go naturally cause I think that is easier to handle. It broke my heart and I miss him dearly. The same with my 16 year old some years later. I havent had a dog since then and that was 5 years ago. They just dont live long enough and the heartbreak is so great. But I treasure their memories and all the joy they brought to me. I will probably get another one eventually but god is it hard to let them go. I am so sorry for your loss. I understand how hard it is. They are precious creatures and bring so much to our lives. This is a lovely write. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi,
    I can really relate to this piece. A pet is like a child. You loved them the same. That pet was a companion, a part of the family. I thought I lost my 2 babies during hurricane Katrina. I was told they had drowned in our home. That tore me up. Then, I was told they survived some kind of way. They must have floated on something. Anyway, I finally located where they are. Ohio of all places...a long way from New Orleans. We will be reunited soon. It made my day. I know one day I will be in your shoes. One is 9yrs old. I will do the same thing you did. Stay with him, comfort him, and cry. Like you said: God will greet! A wonderful heartfelt write. Take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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