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Can this be love?

Author: star_on_fire22
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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hm. figure this one out your self. i dont want to ruin it. bash it if you'd like though....

Can this be love?

what is this feeling in my heart?
the slow flutter in my stomach.
i feel as if i can fly way up above the clouds.
just one look from you make my skin crawl.
when you say my name i shiver.
is this what i think it is....?
can it be?
maybe i fell into the looking glass,
maybe its not real.
but if its not dont tell me, please.
i want to feel this way forever.
you touch my hand and i want to whisper
sweet nothings into your hair.
i resist.
Do you love me too?
or is this all an act,
to lure me in?
i feel so safe in your arms.
you will protect me from any harm.
when your in my pressence i can feel your heart beat in rhythm with mine.
i can not believe i have found this one true happiness.
i lean my head onto your shoulder and stare at the sunset.
slowly you kiss the top of my head lightly and smile.
i can feel your energy all around me.
just thoughts of you fill my mind all day.
i can barely wait until i see you again.
i am truely in love.

Submitted on 2005-11-03 18:35:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I almost forgot the feeling of falling in love. There is nothing like it on earth. You had a great flow of emotions coming out this piece and you show a true heart. Good work.
| Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a great idea and a great feeling but you need to expand. This is sort of cliché-ish and over done. Add some imagination and unique aspects to make you stand out.
| Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]

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