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    dots Submission Name: Moments Like Thisdots
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    Author: kaoriliveshere
    ASL Info:    19/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 5/10/10
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 1579
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       This is the first peom I have ever in my life. I wrote it about my best friend in the 9th grade.


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    Now, I do have feelings inside
    That I can't control anymore.
    Now, I do need you to be by my side
    While I cry by the ocean shore.

    All I can see the stars shine bright
    Just as my brain chases its own tail.
    All I can do is follow this flashlight
    While you stuff sand in a turtle's shell.

    I try to tell you a million times
    That a turtle was going to bite you.
    I try to tell you a joke that rhymes
    While we make the turtle let go of you.

    These are the moments I'll remember
    Just hanging out with my best friend.
    These are the times I'll never forget
    Just being with my best friend.




    Submitted on 2005-11-03 19:09:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The great thing about this poem is that it does not get caught up in the big stuff, but rather, uses the little things in life to make you realize how different the big picture can look, anyone who does not feel nostalgia after reading this clearly missed the point. The use of evenly spaced periods got the point across well, but could be trouble for readers that lack a natural tempo when reading.
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by gt4068 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very sweet poem. it flows nicely and leaves the reader with a feeling of nostalgia of our own past experineces with our friends. you describe what it is like to have a good friend and what it's like to miss the little stupid moments that makes up friendship
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by onepieces | [ Reply to This ]


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