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    dots Submission Name: Why Can't You See?dots

    Author: Darke_Valentine
    ASL Info:    20/Male/UK
    Elite Ratio:    7.65 - 6/3/3
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 884
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       This is just a song I wrote a few years back, because I was so sick of looking around and seeing the world going to hell and no one seeming to notice or care...

    Please tell me what you all think of this. Be it good or bad, any criticism is useful.

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    dotsWhy Can't You See?dots

    Why can’t you see this world we’re in?
    Where beauty and truth are gone
    No more good, we sink into sin
    Men of honour turn out to be a con
    People doing anything for fame
    Selling their souls to the darkness
    Making out that war is a game
    Every day becoming more heartless

    Why is it you cannot see
    This world turning so dark?
    Open your eyes! It’s plain to me
    This world’s growing as black as your heart!

    Can we fall from grace more than we have done?
    Ways of honour and virtue fade
    You care nothing for losers as long as you’ve won
    Look, and see the world you’ve made
    Once upon a time were men of honour and glory
    Who fought battles so others need not die
    Now they’re gone, a mere fantasy story
    And yet no one stops to ask “why?”

    Why is it you cannot see
    This world turning so dark?
    Open your eyes! It’s plain to me
    This world’s growing as black as your heart!

    Politicians control us, we don’t complain
    Even when they use us as they plot and scheme
    You’re their robots, so easy to train
    Can’t you see they’re destroying your dream?
    Can’t you fight for what you believe in?
    Or are you too scared to make a stand?
    Do you even know for what you are fighting?
    Your ignorance is a flaming brand

    Why is it you cannot see
    This world turning so dark?
    Open your eyes! It’s plain to me
    This world’s turning as black as your heart!

    Why can’t you see
    All this waste?
    It’s clearly visible to me
    We rush to our deaths with too much haste...

    Why can’t you see..?

    ©2005, Kyle Hems

    Submitted on 2005-11-04 04:52:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A much, much belated thanks to you both for taking the time to say something about the song.

    I was interested to see the response it brought out in Sweet Sorenity, as I always am when people draw their own meanings from lyrics. It's not a bad thing, but interesting none the less.

    Thanks again, Fluta and Sorenity.
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Darke_Valentine | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this was really really good. i can see i promis. i get ware your commeing from and i like your point of view and how your trying to put it in to perspective for all those brain washed idiot republicans. well their are some brain washed democrates but how can you tell the diffrence these days right


    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      i always try to write something like this but it never seems original enough. i think its great and i feel the same way about this world i love the controversy, i dont think theprime minister would feel the same i would really love to read more of your work. you wrote this a few years ago and it still relates to today.ps thanks for the comments on my lyrics i will work on it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by fluta | [ Reply to This ]

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