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    dots Submission Name: Hurry the Hell Up!dots
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    Author: Indigo Kid
    ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428/438/115
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1106
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 203



    Description:
       Remembering when I used to wait for friends to get ready for going out on the weekends...


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    dotsHurry the Hell Up!dots
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    Silence reaches it soprano cresendo
    almost breaking glass and making my
    skin rise with the phone whispering
    as I anticipate them to get ready
    to go out for our Friday night...




    Submitted on 2005-11-04 16:29:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with Graeme (wewak11)

    You took something commen and brought out the mystery in it
    Leaving us the readers to our imagination wanderibg what will happen
    Very Good Write
    Ron
    If you get a chance please take a look at my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that you have done a good job of describing something that isnt so interesting and have made it so...it is very short but i guess there is little else to say lol...hope you have a good night :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      This is rather unusual, the way you so poetically introduce such a mundane pastime...almost over-dramatic, but you got away with it, it's somehow appealing, so well done

    be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well first to answer your question...No I ain't drunk,but, i did think about it today. I just can't drink with all the heart medications I'm on these days.
    Enjoy your Friday night out and have a good drink for ole doc...
    Enjoyed read'n your poem,
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very short, but good, I like the way you portray waiting, I to know what it is like to have to wait for people to get ready to go out on a Friday night. Well done.

    I also can't believe that five people have read your poem and have nothing to say.

    If you have time please check out some of my poetry.

    Thanks

    Baby Tink
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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