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Hurry the Hell Up!


Author: Indigo Kid
ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428 /438 /115
Words: 31
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Remembering when I used to wait for friends to get ready for going out on the weekends...


Hurry the Hell Up!



Silence reaches it soprano cresendo
almost breaking glass and making my
skin rise with the phone whispering
as I anticipate them to get ready
to go out for our Friday night...




Submitted on 2005-11-04 16:29:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I agree with Graeme (wewak11)

You took something commen and brought out the mystery in it
Leaving us the readers to our imagination wanderibg what will happen
Very Good Write
Ron
If you get a chance please take a look at my poetry and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I think that you have done a good job of describing something that isnt so interesting and have made it so...it is very short but i guess there is little else to say lol...hope you have a good night :)
| Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  This is rather unusual, the way you so poetically introduce such a mundane pastime...almost over-dramatic, but you got away with it, it's somehow appealing, so well done

be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Well first to answer your question...No I ain't drunk,but, i did think about it today. I just can't drink with all the heart medications I'm on these days.
Enjoy your Friday night out and have a good drink for ole doc...
Enjoyed read'n your poem,
!doc`
| Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  This was very short, but good, I like the way you portray waiting, I to know what it is like to have to wait for people to get ready to go out on a Friday night. Well done.

I also can't believe that five people have read your poem and have nothing to say.

If you have time please check out some of my poetry.

Thanks

Baby Tink
| Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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