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    dots Submission Name: I Messed Up!dots

    Author: takenspiritwind
    ASL Info:    21/F/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 117/95/38
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       I wrote this just now as i could not sleep! My bf is spending the weekend but I have grave news for him to hear! I feel so terrible!

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    dotsI Messed Up!dots

    Each night I lie awake waiting for you
    to be with me.
    The tears stream down my ashen
    face thinking of you.
    I think at night I have messed this up and
    it's never going to work.
    I hope and pray that you look
    me in the eye and say that
    you Love Me one more time.
    Has my trust with you been broken,
    or has our love fallen apart?
    We are so close yet so far away.
    I do things I shouldn't do and
    it pains me so.
    Please tell me you will take me in your
    arms and hold me tight.
    I never meant to hurt you but I'm afraid
    that it is too late!

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      True love is forgiving. Yet, true love is not the bearer of bad news either. So, you have some kind of tangled little web going on here.

    This write was sincere. You did show a lot of your genuine feelings in this. It is obvious to see that you truly love this man. And what has transpired you regret and hope that the two of you can keep looking forward and leave the past where it was left.

    This was a ode to being desolate. I truly felt the power of the sorrow and plead for fogiveness.

    Hope all went well.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this was so sweet...poetically it wasn't the best but it had alot of meaning and emotion...plus a good message. This is really honest...sometimes truth is the last thing you have ya know? all in all good write...I liked it alot. keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      aw. i liked this. you have done something that u feel bad for, and its like you are asking for forgiveness. i really liked the part " I hope and pray that you look
    me in the eye and say that
    you Love Me one more time." i have felt this way plenty of times and it scares the hell out of me to think they might not say i love you one more time! keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by roxygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohhh! This sounds like a huge regret to me! It is awful when you feel this way. You know you have done something that is going to hurt someone you love very much and you struggle with trying to find the words to tell them what has happened. I would say that honesty and openness is the best way to go, otherwise you will have to live with it from within yourself forever and that is torturous. I wonder what it is you have done? Cheated on him perhaps? I figure it must be something bad enough to possibly lose him over so that would be my guess. Hope it works out well for you. And I hope that writing this helped you find the right words to say. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      it is the worst thing in the world when you do not know how the one you love is going to react to something you have done - you have so many questions in your mind that you seem almost forced to hide. instead of beating yourself up about it tell him everything i mean you are in love that should over come everything even if that means some rocky times - if you cant deal with rocky times then it was never love .. right? I really hope everything ends up well ! All the luck with your love!

    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm, many questions here tinged I feel with a little insecurity and perhaps vulnerability. The best medicine is honesty and conversation. Share your thoughts with your boyfriend and good luck to you both. This was a very good and insightful write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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