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    dots Submission Name: jesus rapdots
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    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Religious
    Total Views: 593
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 836



    Description:
       this is pretty much a rap about jesus


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    dotsjesus rapdots
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    yo it's boy that made killa flow
    a lot of y'all didn't like it cause it wasn't lyrical
    but i'm coming back cause i read the gospel and now my words are spiritual
    then i finished the Bible so i could be more biblical
    quoting scriptures and painted pictures of Jesus on the crucifixes
    seeing how we lose our riches as Judas snitches
    it all came to me like glitches in a video game
    the way Judas betrayed Jesus with no shame
    he must've been influenced by Satan
    making him become one of the forsaken
    cause Judas was with Jesus, he knew the miracles he had done
    how could Judas cause the capture of God's only Son
    Jesus was the best person under the sun
    just remember in your life keep your God number one




    Submitted on 2005-11-05 14:21:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good...i dont really read the bible so i dont really understand it...but thats ok... i like the ending...that ya god should always be number one. this was a really good piece...keep it up. ur doin good

    -ShOrTie
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      aww lil peter startin to get in that deep [censored] huh talkin about the bible and [censored] i dont really know nuffin bout that u know i dont be goin to church on a weekly bases but u know how dat go any way go write lil one
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]


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