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    dots Submission Name: Insidedots
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    Author: Suicidalchild51
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 402/332/83
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       The first part is about a kid who on friday said he wanted to kill himself cuz he gets made fun of alot and the second is for a friend who gets abuse at home


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    You're just an innocent kid,
    No prices to pay,
    Never say a word,
    But you get picked on anyway.

    The reason for this,
    Theres no reason at all,
    For the fights that they pick,
    Or the names that they call.

    Emos swirlng and whirling, twirling inside,
    I've seen you break down, so small that you cry.

    All I can say,
    is you'll get through,
    Just dont listen to those,
    Them of the cruel.

    I wanna help you Levi,
    I wanna help you live,
    So just give me a chance,
    Let me be your friend.

    .........

    They scream and hit you,
    You got bruises to tell
    But you never tell them
    Exactly how you felt.

    You think your fat and ugly,
    But your beautiful and skinny to the bone,
    Your always telling me,
    How you hate to go home.

    She keeps you in a cage,
    With no escape,
    You need to break free,
    Take a break.

    You've sliced your wrists,
    Erased your skin,
    I only wish,
    We could start over again.

    I wish we all could,
    Just start over again,
    But we can't,
    And it fucking sucks...




    Submitted on 2005-11-05 20:19:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      These Are 2 great poems i really read into them
    i think everybody has been picked on at skool and nobody ever likes it and sometimes there isnt anything you can do about it because telling someone only makes it worse and the second poem is beautiful but i think it could also be made longer into its own poem think about it i would enjoy to see an extention on it
    xXx Mwah Luv Stacey
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      yah...i felt really sorry for him and i always tried to to talk to him but very good poem about him i think that i uderstand it better cuz i knew him very good abd thoughtful..*kisses*
    Kelly
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      it's like 2 different poems in one. i don't think i've ever seen that before. this was good though. i think everybody knows someone that gets [censored]ed over all the time. either that or they are the kid that gets messed with. it's so sad and i'm glad that u took it upon yourself to help them. they're lucky to have a friend like u
    | Posted on 2005-11-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good write. I like the topic, too. It was something abit different from what I've read so far. I hope that boy doesn't kill himself, and I hope that he accepts the hand that you reach out in friendship, I really do. Hope all goes well and great write!
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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