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    dots Submission Name: don't say you love medots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       uh huh....i wrote that today too tell me what you think. Comments are much appriecated.



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    dotsdon't say you love medots
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    don't say you love me
    you don't and i know it
    by the look in your eyes
    and the way you never show it
    you use to hold me tight
    now you're the first to let me go
    so how you claim to love me
    i don't really know
    i will always say i love you
    thats true, i know that much
    but to you it seems that i
    am just another fuck
    so please don't say you love me
    i can't take that lie no more
    just here to let you know
    thats the one lie i can't endure




    Submitted on 2005-11-06 17:06:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great poem. I can relate to it; my ex-fiance fits this poem. That's really cool. In my opinion though, the line:

    "but to you it seems that i
    am just another [censored]"

    doesn't fit right. I personally don't like the way you cut the rhyme off. That's my only problem, otherwise, very good job.

    Always,
    Dark Ainjul
    | Posted on 2005-11-09 00:00:00 | by Ashleigh Mari | [ Reply to This ]
      this was cool. yeah it's true...a lot of the time we're just out for some azz. sad truth. i'm ashamed of it...kinda. i'm sorry this happened to you though. i always remember that pain is my strongest motivation. good job babe.
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hey well i like that. what youre feeling sucks, trust me i understand but it does help to write peotry so keep the good work up!
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, this poem is great, as crazyhawk said, it hits home for me too. I can totally relate with this poem, and agree with crazy hawk as a guy, it not always us that does the hurting. I know how much it hurts to love someone, and know that they are lying when they say they love you back. Everytime they say it, its like you die, just to be reborn and destroyed again when they say it once more. Great write, you've captured the true pain and emotion of the situation. This is one for my favourties.
    | Posted on 2005-11-06 00:00:00 | by hollowshell | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, this is an awesome poem, I love this! Very good and original. Clever, too. I like your rhyming it was rather clever. This is a very sad poem, but it shows al ot of truth as well, maybe that's why I like it so much, great job!
    | Posted on 2005-11-06 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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