Little Shop of Love -------------------------------------------
A bell tinkles as she enters
a boutique of love.
Sandalwood and jasmine scents
enchant and enhance
the mystery of this merchant's wares.
She is greeted by a pleasant smile
from behind a counter,
but without an offer of assistance.
Racks hung with colors
are full and displayed
in simple coordinated arrays.
She briefly looks but
then leaves in disappointment.
There appeared to be little there
that fit her size or fashion requirements.
It just demonstrates
that there is much
she cannot know from
a quick shopping trip.
There is a storehouse full of passion
but limited room to show it.
The warehouse has endless rows,
but she will not see it
until she befriends the owner.
There is not doubt the message is here, but I'm impressed with the description of the shop and wares for sale. I think all of it fits quite well and shows that you think on a piece for some time before it emerges..
She is greeted by a pleasant smile from behind a counter, but without an offer of assistance.
this tells me that when we look too hard for something, we do not find it, how subliminal the soul is when reading messages from another!
I like this write To me It talks about how people judge people from there first visit with them I always thought this was so wrong In order to understand a person you have to get to know them first before making an opinion of someone This write made me think Good Job Ron
And thanks for your comments Tommorow at the redondo reading there will be a film crew for an independent production It should be fun Take Care Ron
i hate to be repetitive but yeah, its an amazing metaphor, crazy analogy, makes me think that we all shop for love, and as we do for products, we also look for certain qualities on a person for us to "buy" them. And i see how hard it is to "shop" when ur only taking a quick look at the "product"... "It just demonstrates that there is much she cannot know from a quick shopping trip. " This is my favourite part tohugh: "She is greeted by a pleasant smile from behind a counter, but without an offer of assistance." and aren't we all alone, without assistence when we go shopping for love? Very nice Caio
This is very good. I really enjoyed reading this one. I think the metaphor is great and most entertaining. A lighthearted and really truthful poem all with its own "style". HA! I love how you have compared finding a love to a store, and how you have said nothing fits your size or fashion requirements. I think that is really clever. And the ending is perfect! A wonderful poem. Take care.
I love the metaphor that you have used here...very creative...very well written and very apt indeed...i also love the descriptive words that use and the thoughts and images that this piece brings about...i enjoyed the way it encouraged me to think a little too...well done! stormy