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    dots Submission Name: Left Comatose, Left For Deaddots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Betrayal
    Total Views: 779
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       i worte this lyrics not too long ago hope you enjoy them.


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    dotsLeft Comatose, Left For Deaddots
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    (Verse 1)
    Bleed my soul onto this paper
    Carve these words in stone,
    Put my heart into this letter
    I once spoke these words to you
    But they went unheard

    (Chorus)
    Betrayal…..
    Force fed lie’s, Forsaken secrets
    You held the knife, that in my back
    These bonds have been severed
    You are nothing more in my life
    Left for dead, left comatose.

    (Verse 2)
    As this heart dies
    These scars won’t heal
    These feelings have been sold,
    To the god painted black,
    The fact still remains…
    You stabbed me in the back

    (Chorus)
    Betrayal…..
    Force fed lie’s, Forsaken secrets
    You held the knife, that in my back
    These bonds have been severed
    You are nothing more in my life
    Left for dead, left comatose.

    (bridge)

    (Verse 3)
    Scars paint the pains of yesterday
    There stained upon my skin
    Pull this knife out my back
    Setting my soul free
    You are the nails in which crucify me.

    (Chorus)




    Submitted on 2005-11-06 23:50:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg this is one of the best tings ive ever read! you had me hooked fromt he first verse, and thats really hard to do. this is so good, and i hope u go foe with yr talent coz u sure do have alot
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by broken_senseles | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know why but this didn't seem like a song that I could sing. I know not why, really, but it just seemed to be more of a poem, more that you might read out loud, than sing.
    Anyway, keep writing,
    for just yourself though. no use writing if it's not to please yourself, right?
    -Mi
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      i have so much respect for people who can write lyrics...these words seem to have so much anger or hate...pretty cool none the less...keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Criss | [ Reply to This ]


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