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    dots Submission Name: Just talkin to myselfdots
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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 869
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 932



    Description:
       okay more rambling. and I dont really like this but, oh well... lets see what you think. I hate trying to ryme but I had to do it for a writting class.


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    dotsJust talkin to myselfdots
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    Im tired
    But I cant sleep
    Too many mixed thoughts
    about everything

    "I like him
    does he like me" or
    " Geometry did I get
    a C or a D"

    Im at my wit's end and
    I think I've lost my mind
    I went to get a new one
    But it was such a long line

    Scool counsler keeps sayin
    "express how oyu feel"
    BUt when I tell him
    He acts like he dont wanna hear

    People keep screaming at me
    May-b the voices in my head
    They keep saying Im not good enough
    And filling me with a new sense of dread

    People keep buggin sayin
    Im not actin right
    But Jeeze it soo hard
    Im tryin with all my might

    I really dont think
    I'm makin any sense
    So I guess right here
    Is where my rant ends




    Submitted on 2005-11-07 03:14:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this...it went through a lot of the things that the average teen ponders of feel at some point or other...
    This poem has a good flow...
    Very good job on this one...

    ...jessie thomas...
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. it sorta makes a good song, a little editing and id say great. but i sure know how you feel in this one.
    xox crazyb
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
      Sound like a song I've heard before? Very good and worth talking about .I been in this place and I'll be tere again. So who is this person you think about night and day that has you so confused? Young love is the best. Anyway if you get a chance come read some of my stuff ok and tell me what you think .
    | Posted on 2005-11-09 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      That is cute and it makes me smile. Boys are like candy, there a dime a dozen, and if one don't like you find a different flavor. it's all just fun. I remember being in highschool and it was all just fun. This poem brings me back. I really enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]


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