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    dots Submission Name: Moonlight Serenadedots

    Author: Toadslayer
    ASL Info:    35/Female/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 32/38/15
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMoonlight Serenadedots

    waiting, she sits, bathed in light,
    a reflection of memory in the night
    against the window of intimate thoughts
    she pauses to collect her inner wants

    and in the moonlit arms of night
    two pairs of eyes do meet, and warm alike,
    across a darkened room, with outstretched
    arms, two souls embrace

    the dance of dark and light
    the rustling of robe and breath
    silent whispers against the floor
    the two approach and intertwine

    soft hands on warm skin
    with intermingled affection
    captured in silent moments of reflection
    caught in a moonlight serenade

    Submitted on 2004-04-22 12:57:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's simple in it's compostion yet very intricate in it's thoughtfulness. reading it challneges the mind to create it's own imagery as opposed to precribing precisely what one is supposed to see. You did an excellent job with this one! brava ma cher...
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful! this is simply beautiful! i love the images you portrayed here... your picture was just soooo awesome.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]

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