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    dots Submission Name: NO REGRETS (INTENSIVE CARE) IIdots
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    Author: dycrain
    ASL Info:    56/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    7.33 - 51/54/19
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Story/
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    Description:
       Feeling stronger, I am finally able to write about my Dad. Previously, I found it impossible to do.
    This accounting actually happened in Las Vegas, Nevada. They starved my Dad till death, and to top it off, gave him two laxatives about one hour apart, then wondered why his stomach was hurting so bad.
    I am looking for your honest opinion of my poem. Is there anything you would word in a different manner? If published, would you take the time to stop and read it? Your thoughts and suggestions are appreciated.
    God bless,
    Yvonne


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    dotsNO REGRETS (INTENSIVE CARE) IIdots
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    Now, back to the present
    in the hospital, where you do lay
    Family must meet with the doctor's
    let's see what they have to say

    Many questions and concerns
    in a room we all met
    Every question answered, then produced an x-ray
    explaining their findings with regret

    Esoterically said, "esophagus too damaged"
    "Cannot, orally, give anything"
    Food or water will surely drown
    Death it will quickly bring

    To view closer, this x-ray passed
    from one to the other
    None of this makes sense, upon the x-ray
    another man's name, we did discover

    Like the "keystone cops," doctors fidgeting
    Eyes darting, could this happen again?
    Tried to assure us, this was Pop's, regardless of name
    NOW HOW COULD THIS HAPPEN !

    Hospital, doctors, malpractice
    for sure
    Starving Pop to death they are doing
    while searching for a cure

    What relief has he received for his back pain
    the reason he is even here?
    Absolutely nothing, treating a disease he does not have
    Thinking this will show us they, truly, do care

    Pop was called home, leaving his body starved, thirsty
    and in pain, was clear to see
    Wasted away, given last rites
    a beautiful soul now set free

    His last deed
    gave Mom a wink
    Left a grieving family
    because his doctors were out of sync

    With love, within my heart
    I do recall
    Pop's care and kindness
    he showed to all

    This man, I called "Pop"
    thank you for showing me the way
    In heaven we will meet again
    Until then, I do pray; in peace you shall stay

    I will never forget
    your first and last words to me
    "Oh, Baby"
    "I AM SO HUNGRY"

    Such a horrible departure
    feeling angry and sad
    Hence, with love "Pop"
    I shall now call you, "DAD"

    (copyright)
    Yvonne Marie Crain
    October 16, 2005




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      i know that this was hard for you. and i dont think i will be submitting anything soon, but i will worry and pray for you yvonne. god bless again
    | Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by kite martyr | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate hospitals, my mother went to the hospital for catarac and glaucoma surgery, they od'd her with blood thinner, she spent five months in a different hospital trying to save her life, they had to amputate her leg and then to top it all off she was abused by one of the nursing staff! needless to say, she still can't see, didnt even get the glaucoma or catarak surgeries she went in for! your poem is full of so much emotion, and i am so sorry for your loss. it is bad enough to lose someone you love when they are ederly and sick, but to lose someone that wasnt even sick until they got there is awful, i hope you sued the hospital, bush has put that stupid cap on malpractice suits, my mother doctor bills are over two million dollars, and she is only allowed to sue for 250,000 for them nearly killing her! It was a university hospital in Tyler, Tx. not too many lawyers want to sue a university! sorry about the long comment, just still a new and touchy subject for me, she was just released Oct. 10 this year. finally home and still having nurses come twice a day, when she was never sick before in her life!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds to me like such an awful and horrible thing to experience. I just dont understand how this could happen. I am a registered nurse, I dont know if I told you that already, so I am very familiar with medicine. I am left confused with this. If they said he couldnt take anything by mouth, why was there no feeding tube in place to give him the nutrients he needed? A nasogastric tube should have been in place so he could receive the water and food he could not swallow. Did they actually mix up the xrays? Why did they send him home? I am sorry for asking so many questions but this situation is awful and I cant understand how this could happen. Why did he die? I feel immensely for you and your family, the anger you must feel. I can only imagine. Maybe if you feel up to it, you could elaborate on this some more with me and help me to understand. I am so very sorry this happened. This is a very good write about something so difficult. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I would have said more than I will but my sorrow for you comes from the heart, I hope things can work out for you. I'm sorry to hear this. god bless you.
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by kite martyr | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poem was heartfelt with a mixture of emotion; anger and resentment at the hospital staff, pain at seeing your dad this way and at his eventual passing, the love you felt for him, the fear for your dad, the situation he was in and for your family at the prospect of losing him. It is an emotional poem and I am sure a tabloid would be interested in this story with your poetry attached. There are a few things I would change if it were my work; In the first line. You say 'Now back to the present', I felt this should be 'Now back to the past' because you are talking past tenths? The rhyming could do with a little attention, but I think you need to be careful about changing it too much because when I read the poem, I felt the emotion and it would be sad to lose this just for the sake of rhyming. I am so sorry for you and my heart goes out to you and your family. This is a great poem in memory of your dad. Take care. litllost.
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]
      very sad here, I hope everything works out for you and your family. this mixing up of the x-rays the names that are misplaced on them I find that to be an all too common problem in the medical field. surgeons leaving tools inside people and mixing up medications it crushes faith in the already costly world of health care. very good to write about this. I find this to be a topic that people should explore. this is the first write where I have seen this. I like how you describe the group of doctors puzzling as “keystone cops” and why not I say? they huddle around not knowing what the hell they are doing, sometimes you almost have to give them a quick kick in the pants to get them started again. now how could this happen at the end means two things to me. it means how could they mix up the name on the x-ray but it also means the damage shown on the x-ray is unbelievable, a reaction that is common when someone finds out about something troubling. the capital letters are good for emphasis. very nicely done here, and take it easy,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]


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