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    dots Submission Name: candy Ciggarettesdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 892
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    Description:
       Well I think that this is pretty much self explanitory...I know, all this is just emotional shit that I had to write, my outlet man.


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    it sounds like an addiction but it's not
    it sounds like denial, what can I say to that?
    in my defense maybe I'll just say that I'm careful
    maybe I'll just show you that I haven't changed
    maybe I'll just tell you that I love you

    not that you would be decieved
    you think that this is just another way to tell you to leave me alone
    but I love
    you
    But I'm okay
    and I'm begging you to fathom
    that these aren't candy ciggarettes
    but they really aren't that bad either
    I'm telling you man
    I'm okay




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      I liked this one too...who was it directed to? A specific person or people (our family) in general?
    I really liked this...and I know how you feel...espically the first few lines...
    it sucks when people wont belive that you not in denial... and what can you do in that situation?
    This was a powerful poem too...

    jessie thomas...
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not really that in love with it. I'll give it to you honestly, I get tired of the poems where you're trying to ask someone to understand one addiction or another. And I can say that, cause you told me the Tony poems were getting old. I like the ones you write about me...They're always so vivid, and you get right to that pain. But, once again, you've said the same d*mn thing to me. Try writing a poem about Jessie, it's fun!
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      well its kinda short in i umm.. dont really know the point but poetry wise its good
    really good, nice rythem and good flow
    nice how you intertwined love in there
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I have to say to me it sounds like my son talking to me. lol. But I did get what you were trying to get across. It was a bit confusing at first. But when I read it the second time it still was a bit confusing especially "I'm begging you to fathom" Not quit sure what you wanted to get across there. I think I know but not sure.
    But you are a good writer. Thank you for sharing with us. God bless
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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