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    dots Submission Name: whats it gonna take?dots

    Author: lost and alone
    ASL Info:    19/F/Sandiego,CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 159/140/58
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotswhats it gonna take?dots

    I often wonder, if you really care.
    You tell me that you do,
    that there's really something there.
    But I see so little of you,
    It's hard to know,
    if it's real or if it's just a show.
    You tell me that your gonna change,
    But life is too short,
    to make promises you can't keep.
    Soon I'm gonna dissapear.
    I've heard all I wanna hear.
    Because all it is is talk.
    and talk is cheap.
    Words are a dime a dozen.
    And I've got one for everytime,
    you say your gonna change.
    Don't think I'm gonna wait around,
    and play this little game.
    Make up your mind,
    right here and right now.
    otherwise you'll be, looking at me,
    from behind and all your gonna see,
    is me, walking away,
    and right out of your life.

    Submitted on 2005-11-07 10:36:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very good. I can relate to this write of yours. Waiting for someone to change is hell. Ive been there. Oh well that is my opinion anyways. Thanks for sharing with us.
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]

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