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    dots Submission Name: the walkdots
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    Author: papalegba
    ASL Info:    45/male/schenectady ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 52/42/28
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 702
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    Description:
       when you take a walk always go with open eyes,open heart and an open mind to get the utmost feelings this will let you write well


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    dotsthe walkdots
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    on passing by this old house
    looking empty
    there was a soul living there
    called mrs. mcnalley
    she would have the children call on her
    only to have them cut the legs off her chair
    the children to hounor her
    would start a fire in the middle of her livingroom
    still she had a love for all people
    no matter what they did to make her suffer
    one day i was looking for her
    as i always did
    for she owned a pice of my heart
    i found that she was found dead on her floor
    the children of all ages felt breif pain
    maybe because they had lost a person
    to torment i will never know
    or if the children remember the pain
    they gave this saint of the elder's
    now her house is gone the children
    burned it to the ground
    there is a new house on the sight
    but do the owners has a clue
    to the history and the pain
    that went on there years before
    do they ever feel the spirit of mrs. mcnalley
    i wish i knew
    so many things you see and know
    when you go on the walk






    Submitted on 2005-11-07 14:41:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem has a lesson to it
    always have an opean heart mind and eyes throughout life
    i liked it

    memento mori
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    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      good write. the flow of the poem needs some work though. it's kinda choppy.. other than that, i really liked it,, keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]


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