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    dots Submission Name: Candle Quietdots
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    Author: Reckoner
    Elite Ratio:    5.04 - 122/164/128
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Just a simple dismal finding...just coughed it out..


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    dotsCandle Quietdots
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    A swirling oblivion
    The chocolate patterns on his birthday cake
    Screaming creatures
    Dreaming of a surface to grasp
    One idle moment in this happy day to scrap reason
    Turn a blind eye to practicality for one moment
    And pay back the candles for forcing this number upon you
    The cursed wretch of a well adjusted woman
    You saved up your years for a way back to heaven
    Nothing but rain painted windows and faded smoke
    The people all rusty in the old hanging frames
    Not even a shadow to wish you a better tommorow
    My good old skeleton friend
    Just a baby posing as a crushing mallet

    Pay the hand what's been given unto him
    Show no malice when scraping his face off your rotting cake

    My good man
    Plotting a watery grave where a tree should be
    I admire your ways so much
    Rising above the cliffs as you pull yourself above the edge
    You speak of these dying breeds like they don't exist
    These monsters with candles for teeth
    Where did you make your living under heaven
    You shouldn't believe in me if you want to wake up tommorow
    Just tell me and I will leave you and your blind eyes alone
    Everything is fine
    Everything is fine
    Just tell me and I will take my oblivion away with me
    Serve my time near that lonely table
    In the darkness surrounded by so much light

    Just listen to me
    Never ever betray me







    Submitted on 2005-11-07 18:41:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmmmmmm...birthday cake.hahaha. Sorry, i guess I'm just giddy...and I know that my bro would understand. So hey gare... what's new? How's life? You feeling ok? Your mental state doing fine? Are you stable? Mentally? Physically? How's your care? The family? Cricket? How's Matt? Life? stuff? get back at me... :D
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]


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