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    dots Submission Name: Straw Dogsdots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This has to do with the rootlessness some people claim makes them who they are and permits them never to try. I tend to believe every speck of experience we've felt is like a straw in a scarecrow; for good or ill, it makes us who we are, and how we respond to our experiences determines the type of person we'll become.


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    dotsStraw Dogsdots
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    Bundle these sad
    husks into men,
    teach them to smile
    and stand erect,
    cause them to know
    their helpless ease
    left better souls bereft
    of a higher intent.
    Let them be elegant
    as wisdom, humbled
    into softer flesh.

    Perhaps you're
    mistaken. The end
    of your world is
    not the beginning
    of mine; the ever
    questioned great unknown
    baffling an atonal mind.
    If it weren't for
    scraps that weld themselves
    into familiar forms,
    none of the elements
    could hope to dance, tethered
    to better charms.

    Yet you said you're
    from nowhere? That's
    hard to believe.
    You have to come from
    somewhere to be somewhere
    to be someone to be.
    If you come from
    nowhere you
    wouldn't be
    anywhere and
    then where would
    you be?




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      Kind of had my tongue twisted but a lot of truth. We all are somebody and all came from somewhere. So anybody can be somebody, and the rest of us can help someone...hehe
    A very cute write!

    Smiles,
    Linda
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked the third stanza the best. so thought provoking your words are. i loved the description you gave at the beginning, it helped me see my ex all through this poem. always blaming others for the way you are but doing nothing to make it better or learn from it. take what you are given and be a better person because of it!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked the third stanza the best. so thought provoking your words are. i loved the description you gave at the beginning, it helped me see my ex all through this poem. always blaming others for the way you are but doing nothing to make it better or learn from it. take what you are given and be a better person because of it!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a well written poem and I agree with your point of view. I think a lot of how some people view things is motivated by laziness. Kinda funny to say that, some kind of oxymoron or something but it is true. It takes a lot of work and effort and thinking to keep from having things be expected of you. It is a shame that some choose to live this way. I think a certain amount of it comes from low self worth and minimal self respect but a lot is just from being lazy. If you can convince people what you are saying is how you are, then they wont expect much and in turn, their life is easier. I, too, believe that all experiences make us who we are. We learn from everything good or bad. This is very well written and expressed. The last stanza is nicely done too. Adds character and validates your point effectively. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think your 'yours' were right. I understood it perfectly and liked it too. being from alot of different places, or rather, having lived in alot of different places I can somewhat understand someone saying they're from nowhere but that's just a point they're at right now I think. they don't want to be from where they actually came from or are now at--this could get confusing, but anyway, they might find out where they're at eventually! that's why I hate the label 'midwestern poet' since I'm not 'from' the midwest. I just happen to live here now. but you know darned well, someone will call us that eventually. nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written..i enjoyed this immensely and have to say that i share your views and thoughts wholeheartedly...i despise the way people label and judge others ...even defending and explaining it away ...people are made up of their experiences this is so true... another big factor is also what they choose to do with them...how they choose to learn or not learn from them ...and some refuse to grow...

    "I tend to believe every speck of experience we've felt is like a straw in a scarecrow; for good or ill, it makes us who we are, and how we respond to our experiences determines the type of person we'll become."

    So very true! This piece is a fantastic way of sharing wisdom and so very well written...my fav verse is the first...it is so neatly written and says so much...i love the tone of it and the witty way that you have summed up your thoughts..

    Bundle these sad
    husks into men,
    teach them to smile
    and stand erect,
    cause them to know
    their helpless ease
    left better souls bereft
    of a higher intent.
    Let them be elegant
    as wisdom, humbled
    into softer flesh.


    Loved it!...stormy
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmmm. Another damnation of society's "labelling"
    Really enjoyable, I liked your "waste of space" reference in S1, and the cynical damnation that they aren't tthe be all and and all in S2.

    S3, almost a perfect paradox, let's see 'em come up with an answer to that...

    Great stuff Bill, very enjoyable

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Normally, I'm not into the more instructive tones in poetry, but I enjoyed this one. Perhaps it was the prayerful beginning that set the proper mood.

    I stumbled on the start of the second stanza, where you have 'your' where there should be a 'you're'.

    I really enojoyed the playfulness of metaphorical position in the third stanza, going from nowhere, somewhere and anywhere. Nice touch;)

    Cheers!

    Todd
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]


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