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    dots Submission Name: when i wake updots

    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       i really am too self-pitying.. starving people in afraica and all i do is whine whine whine. but i cry for them too. i cry for the world.

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    dotswhen i wake updots

    wake up in the morning thinking
    wow its way past my bedtime
    i love the theatre
    maybe because im so well practiced at making people see what i want them to see
    i wake up every day so exhausted from hiding
    this pitiful little girl in a bitchy baggy disguise
    eyeliner painting away the tears i cry every day

    somethings got to give
    so give it to me

    i laugh away the pain i feel
    and smile away the tears
    but i cant laugh alone
    and i dont smile at home

    somethings got to give
    so give it to me

    i fall asleep so tired of crying
    i wake up so tired of hiding
    i go to bed and sing myself a song of another girl
    in another world so far from here
    with no reason to scream

    somethings got to give
    so give it to me
    and let me hold on tight as i fall asleep at night
    wondering why
    i have to cry
    all the time

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      I like this…especially “somethings got to give, so give it to me”. The rest just flows well…good write.
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome job would love to hear it with music, It truely does flow real nicely and I greatly enjoyed reading this , you are quite talented and you write just beautifully so keep writing and I hope to hear this with the music someday, I am liking this one so much I am adding it to my favs
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written. Have you set it to music yet? It flows very nicely and the stanza helps to pull it all together. The stanza is my favorite part of the lyrics. Well done. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Toadslayer | [ Reply to This ]

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