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    dots Submission Name: Economics Testdots
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    Author: Lafferty
    ASL Info:    18/ female/perth WA
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 39/20/15
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 979
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 811



    Description:
       sorry teenage angst thing is bad. Actually wrote it is my test and my teacher is called Mr simon.


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    dotsEconomics Testdots
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    Stony silence from the dark void
    A glimpse of the year
    But no answer forthcoming
    A child hides in cold and the dark
    The decisions before her daunting
    Till two am the night before
    A dog named Simon prowls
    Watching the strugglers from the herd
    What he knows he won't tell
    Scarce the energy to lift the pen
    Her own weakness disgusts her
    'Fuck off' I say to prying eyes
    I do not want my weakness laid bare
    But it doesn't matter
    Because everyone can see me
    Limping in the tall grass of my dreams
    The soft pale underbelly
    Vulnerable to the slash of teeth
    From the dark child within
    trying to escape the void
    But how can I let that darkness into the world?




    Submitted on 2005-11-07 21:17:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      nah, i like the "teh", its very h@XX0R.

    good poem. not one of your best, but still above the normal stuff you find here.
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by dublhelix | [ Reply to This ]
      its very intimidating until i read it was about a test. even then i can feel your pain. was the test really hard? was there some sort of consequence to bombing the test? im intrigued...
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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