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I want your fingers to reach for mine. To dip inside a glass of wine and trace my lips. I want your fingers to map out route 66 on my epitheliels. To draw the way through the maze of my nerves. I deserve your fingers to whisper songs on the small hairs behind my neck, down my arms through the rivers to deliver a message of love. I want your fingers to linger and dive inside. I want your fingers one then two then five and ten. Then I shall own the rest of you. |
This is what erotic poetry is about. I personally like first person poetry, so I've no qualms about the use of the first-person nominative. This is the best work...okay fine, it's the only thing I've read all day, but I really enjoyed it. Favoriting this one. Most definitely.| Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ] | This was a good piece, I did'nt really like the format but the voice behind it was great and sort of made me forget that. I dont really see a problem with this piece other than it's form or lack thereof. Good piece, I enjoyed it. | Kuddos, Jermaine. | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ] | Very emotive and sensual poem. Evokes very loving images. "my arms through the rivers to deliver a message of love." Conveys very effectively the strong lovers bond. | | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Septembruary | [ Reply to This ] | well, this is definitely an interesting poem. i am sure i'm taking it the correct way. but i won't deal with it that way. it like it very much. it's passionate. sorry, paplegba, but i think that this poem hasn't suffocated, but released her. and a poem doesn't have to be long and formed out. as long as it gets the poets point across, it's okay. and this one is okay. keep it up | | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by frozenflame | [ Reply to This ] | i like the feel i like the vision tomany I"S it should be streched out the compactness of the poem sufficates you in the feeling think tall and form | | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by papalegba | [ Reply to This ] | |