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    dots Submission Name: your fingersdots

    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsyour fingersdots

    I want your fingers to reach for mine. To dip inside a glass of wine and trace my lips.
    I want your fingers to map out route 66 on my epitheliels.
    To draw the way through the maze of my nerves.
    I deserve your fingers to whisper songs on the small hairs behind my neck, down my arms through the rivers to deliver a message of love.
    I want your fingers to linger and dive inside.
    I want your fingers one then two then five and ten. Then I shall own the rest of you.

    Submitted on 2005-11-08 10:14:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is what erotic poetry is about. I personally like first person poetry, so I've no qualms about the use of the first-person nominative. This is the best work...okay fine, it's the only thing I've read all day, but I really enjoyed it. Favoriting this one. Most definitely.
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good piece, I did'nt really like the format but the voice behind it was great and sort of made me forget that. I dont really see a problem with this piece other than it's form or lack thereof. Good piece, I enjoyed it.

    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Very emotive and sensual poem. Evokes very loving images. "my arms through the rivers to deliver a message of love." Conveys very effectively the strong lovers bond.
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Septembruary | [ Reply to This ]
      well, this is definitely an interesting poem. i am sure i'm taking it the correct way. but i won't deal with it that way. it like it very much. it's passionate. sorry, paplegba, but i think that this poem hasn't suffocated, but released her. and a poem doesn't have to be long and formed out. as long as it gets the poets point across, it's okay. and this one is okay. keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by frozenflame | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the feel i like the vision tomany I"S it should be streched out the compactness of the poem sufficates you in the feeling think tall and form
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by papalegba | [ Reply to This ]

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