Yeah! MUch better! I didn't mean to make you feel bad, I was just trying to be honest. You write beautifully, but the way you've gotten into certain things p*sses me off, and I GET ANGRY WHEN YOU ROMANTICIZE ALL THIS HORRIBLE SH*T WITH POETRY. I didn't mean to capitalize all that, but I'm too lazy to go back and rewrite it. It's my birthday, be-atch, and so far it sucks *ss. You left your makeup bag in my car. I really liked this poem.
I'm not sure what to say about this piece. I like how you dug into her character trying to comprehend her but I dont think you dug far enough or maybe you dont know enough about her. I'm still left in mystery as to who this woman is, the picture you painted about her was not vivid enough to make me feel like I knew her. In the end I have to agree with you, I too wish I could meet her.
she sounds like quite a character. Someone who a person cant help but love. It is a very good tribute to your friend. Keep up the good work. You are right she does bring out the artist in your writing. Thanks for sharing with us. Have a good day.