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    dots Submission Name: welcomedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 616
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 345



    Description:
       just off the tp of my head


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    dotswelcomedots
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    welcome to suicide.
    welcome to pain.
    welcome to death.
    welcome to strain.
    welcome your nightmares,
    they're better than life.
    welcome the blood,
    that i've dran with m knife.
    murder is happy,
    its a fun game top play.
    living forever,
    yet dying each day




    Submitted on 2005-11-08 13:15:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a little like a dark nursery rhyme or something you could picture the kids from the Munsters singing!
    I thought the end held a powerful statement.
    Good!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
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    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Are you sure these are'nt lyrics, with a band and some bass guitars you could become a rock star with this. I think ther's probably too many welcomes in the piece, it just a bit too repetitive.

    Peace,
    Jermaine.
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good, I would use these as lyrics if you hadn't written them first, lol! It was very good and straight to the point, great job and I hope to see more from you.
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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