The length a a poem I've always thought was regulated by the amount of clarity in the verse. And it also can be short if a question is left for the reader to forulate an answer. Doubt; is always in question, never fully explained and un-trustworthy. No clarity, no real answers so why not be short, sweet and to whatever point you wish to make. Doubt here alao leads us to question motives, either it be love or friendship, it's apparently short as well! Wonderful thought created here, just another example of good writing. You are a breath of fresh air here, so make a few new friends and stick around. Thanks for getting back to me, you are very welcome!
I have friends like this, many in fact. Can't let them go.
I should I should I should
It gets so heavy at times....
this cloak of obligation (of love? of what exactly is it?) we don, why we wear it, I'm not sure when I put mine on, and why it doesn't come off, but there it is. there it will stay. it defies logic, but holds my heart - and it bleeds me - always.....
This is a good start to what could become an excellent write Expand a litlle more on your feelings and why you should call him Let out some emotion You can do it If you do decide to revise it please let me know as id love to read it
Take Care Ron
Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
Yes. too short, no. doubt is well described. How many words do you need to describe and emotion? only a few if they are the right ones.
I like the lyrical nature of the poem, although it adds to the brevity of the piece it makes it memorable. The rhyme scheme works well here as well, of course contributing to the lyrical nature of the piece. aacbbcddc, in near trochee's through out.
At first i really didn't understand it. after thinking about how the ending could come into play with it all i began to notice a few perspectives that could lead me to understand it. thanks for sharing.
I think i get what your saying. It seems like some sort of internal conflict going on in your head. Your really worried about this certain someone. Anyway, I like it. It's short and sweet and the absence of punctuation gives it this "bluntness", that makes it seem like you're somewhat confused or on the otherhand, you know exactly what you want to say.