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Submission Name: Roaming with you dots

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Author:	Toadslayer
ASL Info:	35/Female/Ohio
Elite Ratio:	3.08 - 32/38/15
Words:	47

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	1207
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	303

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A poem written to my sweetheart after spending time in a state park. I'm not really sure how I feel about the title but I couldn't think of anything else. Feel free to make suggestions.

Roaming with you dots

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A black and white of you in my mind
An imprint on my heart
Deep breaths echoing against the walls
As my body silhouettes yours
The trees an etching on the setting sun
Cool river trickling,
babbling a melody with the trees,
A counterpoint to my heartbeat.

Submitted on 2005-11-08 18:04:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I love nature - and you'll notice a lot of mine too are inspired by nature.
I live in Northern Cali - Placerville - outside of Sac and I spend a lot of time at the river and in the foothills and mountains.
This reminded me of a poem reflecting a photographic black & white - like Ansel Adams - and I'm glad you have these times to commemorate and reflect on!
Great!
Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE! tif

| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
wow even in it's simplicity it manages to capture a feeling that most could not in a hundred words or less... I really really like this piece sis! Bravo!
| Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.