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    dots Submission Name: Roaming with youdots
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    Author: Toadslayer
    ASL Info:    35/Female/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 32/38/15
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1172
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 303



    Description:
       A poem written to my sweetheart after spending time in a state park. I'm not really sure how I feel about the title but I couldn't think of anything else. Feel free to make suggestions.


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    dotsRoaming with youdots
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    A black and white of you in my mind
    An imprint on my heart
    Deep breaths echoing against the walls
    As my body silhouettes yours
    The trees an etching on the setting sun
    Cool river trickling,
    babbling a melody with the trees,
    A counterpoint to my heartbeat.




    Submitted on 2005-11-08 18:04:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love nature - and you'll notice a lot of mine too are inspired by nature.
    I live in Northern Cali - Placerville - outside of Sac and I spend a lot of time at the river and in the foothills and mountains.
    This reminded me of a poem reflecting a photographic black & white - like Ansel Adams - and I'm glad you have these times to commemorate and reflect on!
    Great!
    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE! tif
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      wow even in it's simplicity it manages to capture a feeling that most could not in a hundred words or less... I really really like this piece sis! Bravo!
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]


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