Maybe the Stars From Above...

Author: BleedingTears ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418 /289 /62 Words: 101

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Maybe the Stars From Above...

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Maybe the stars from above know the answers to all our questions. They see everything from living up above. The stars know the truth of our lies that we continue The stars can hear our cries and regrets They hold what no one can. They are formed by the sins we only commit. Too many stars Too many lies Nothing is so real like the stars from above The sky is quilted black, while gorgeous green eyes looking up at the stars Looking at everything at alls might Seeing so much not expected Maybe it's all in the stars from above.

Submitted on 2005-11-08 18:45:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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ooo i like this one. i get that youre saying that the stars know everything, they basically sense guilt on a persons conseience. i dont really get where you go after that, but i like the initial idea.

| Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]

I like the imagery you've created and the kind of message you are putting across. The only thing that I really keep getting distracted by is the flow. Having short sentences then long ones, and changing it abruptly makes it harder to read. I agree with Danni when it comes to the meaning Regards, Kalinda

| Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]

Sometimes the times you have no idea what you are saying the product is the best, if that makes any sense. I like it, though, it's very interesting!

| Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by risingrockstar | [ Reply to This ]

I kinda think that you're saying the stars are ominesent (spell cheak?) that they are all knowing. Sort of how my friend says that the walls are listening you're saying teh stars see everything hear everything and know everything. They know when we're lying tellling the truth etc. I think this is a good train of thought. But that's just me. ~~Danni~~

| Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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