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All About You

Author: BleedingTears
ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
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Words: 188
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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something crappy but i guess i just wanted to putit up here. its not like my other stuff but idk.

All About You

I hated how I loved you and you didnt know I was there.
And the way you walked on by me as if I was only air.
Day by day I only think about you
And at night I cry because I'm living without you
I've only wrote these few lines and my eyes are watery and red
You're the only thing, day and night, going through my head
Not a night goes without me saying goodnight to the picture in my head of your face
It feels my life is frozen and I'm not going any place.
My memory has gone blank about everything we have done and said.
Seems everything is over, seems that everything is dead.
And it hurt so bad to look straight in your eye
Because that feeling that you gave me,made me want to die.
I dont know how to tell you how I actually feel.
Then it will feel like a cut, that never seems to heal.
And I cant stand to tell you the things that I do
Because then you'll actually notice that its all about you////

Submitted on 2005-11-08 23:42:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i bet i know who this one is about ;) but besides that, i really like it. i too have felt this way about a few people in the past. you just gotta tell them this stuff and see if they feel the same way. if not, just try to stay friends with them..who knows, it might work out in the end even if it doesn't seem that way right now.
| Posted on 2008-01-20 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
  alright, i'm not gonna tell you how to feal not live, besides i'm not one you should take advice on that anyways. however with this write it seems more like a diary entry. I get it and all, and it has feeling and stature, however i might thow in some colorization, synonyms, and restructure it. not bad
| Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
  a crush?? don't let everything u do be about one person... as I like to repeat DO YOU and life's trails wnt seem so bad,,
| Posted on 2005-11-09 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

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