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I Feel Like I Can Fly, So High


Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118 /154 /45
Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Was it subtle or too in your face?


I Feel Like I Can Fly, So High



Looking very enticing,
Is the grass on which he sits.
The tambourine man,
Playing his musical hits.

The blue sky,
Covered with cloudy grey smoke.
A chill in the air,
Is this a lucky stroke?

The journey to this place,
Was one hell of a trip.
I wish this was my reality,
It would be a total flip.

Rocks and stones everywhere,
I've climbed really high.
This is my bliss,
I feel like I can fly.




Submitted on 2005-11-10 12:49:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was really good..I know everyone would think it's a drug experience but personally I have had days where there is a natural "high" and I think if someone tried hard enough they wouldn't even need drugs to experience happiness. but this was really good and I am definatly adding it to my favorites.
peac.e
~silent
| Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  the title reminded me of a John Legend song "so high"...

excellent description of a moment that i could never fully put in words but have experienced alot. the ending of your poem got my mind "flying".

*keep spreading the love*

nadia
| Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds like an out of body experience. And of course anyone this day and age is completely brainwashed to think the reason is drugs. Maybe that stereotype is correct this time, however...
| Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by RequiemOfDreams | [ Reply to This ]
  i don't think it's subtle or in your face, i think it's a pretty generic picture of being high, which is appropriate becuase there's really nothing more generic and pitiful than getting high. you start to hint at some imagery in the first verse, but then it goes all cliché' from there. if you want a decent poem then rewrite everything except the first verse. hope this helps.
| Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
  I believe the best way to describe this is a natural High
Being high on Life

Its vey different and I like the concept
Great Job
Ron
| Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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