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    dots Submission Name: Dream Ladydots
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    Author: auntwheezie
    ASL Info:    45/Female/Dartmouth NS
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 75/57/18
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 200
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1255



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    dotsDream Ladydots
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    Three times I have seen this face
    in my dreams,
    Vague, unfinished around the edges
    Eyes filled with uncertainty, love...
    victory even.
    Victory! Over what?
    Over me...?
    Over herself?
    Love is there for me, for us
    That I am certain of.
    Why love this person?
    She hated so much what she was and is.

    Her eyes filled with the fire of purpose
    Sparkled when she smiled, not often enough.
    Her integrity with which she held onto each ideal
    Her ability to listen and hear each nuance.
    Those lips that I knew would set fire to each
    place they touched
    The completeness I felt when she was near
    What draws us to the unknown, the different,
    the unreachable?

    Things are perfect in our dreams
    The smells, tastes, feelings.
    Are they memories of what was?
    A portent of what is to come.
    The overpowering emotions and
    Warmth between us was
    Unlike anything I have felt before.
    It was raw, on fire, orgasmic.
    Looking into those eyes
    Drowning in the color, feeling, everything
    I was not saved by the noise
    Which ended my sleep




    Submitted on 2005-11-10 13:22:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What is this about???
    Its a dream of yours that is open to interpretation but i wish it was more explanitory. I would give it a 3 instead of a 4 just because of the mystery. Mystery's a good thing but still...
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      It was a beautiful description of love. Excellent, simply excellent. And you have a great writing style as well. Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by Yclipse | [ Reply to This ]
      Can i that your poem was beautiful it meant alot to me i got alot from it.
    I dont know excactly what it was about but what i thought it was about i got alot from it thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by scented | [ Reply to This ]



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