Ohhh sweet. I definitely like the last two lines the best... saying, "It's obvious, we're meant for each other!" and the 2nd line... almost a promise to stay with together always. I have to be redundant and say how can you put so much into just a couple of lines of writing?!? Very nice job.
if this was a depressed poem, it certainly did alot to raise my spirits...i guess that is what great writing is supposed to do, one way or the other....powerful stuff....cheers
the last two lines were the main lines of the poem. deep meaning but takes a time to sink in, but how can you write such a lot in two lines!! great talent you have there!!!
I really love your minimalist style. You load so much emotion and meaning into so few words,. That is a genuine talent, I envy you. Keep up the fantastic writes. Silver
Wow!!! This was a deep one! Said so much in a few short lines. Very powerful. ...and sink further together than we ever could apart. Great ending. Turned the tides in one sentence.
Submission Name: Naked in the Oceans
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