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    dots Submission Name: Summer's Falldots

    Author: RequiemOfDreams
    ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 97/140/38
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Think about nature and the nature of the seasons. Spring goes to summer and summer goes to fall... there is meaning and perhaps you should look at it carefully :)

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    dotsSummer's Falldots

    Itís the fall of Summer, the year begins to end
    And at the end of this year, I finally break the trend
    For Summer's fall brings new resolutions
    To fix life's many pollutions
    And I look upon the the worsening weather
    My eyes follow a free flowing feather
    I feel it flow along, raped by the air
    Going nowhere, all unaware

    Now I am as an apple, free to fall if I wish
    But if I hold on, I won't be served in some dish
    To corporate fools, eating all they see
    The proletariat, I won't always be
    Rise in rank, race to reward
    Go to college, so I can afford
    To live a life of coins

    And as the leafs fall around me, I grow
    And as houses fall around me, I ripen
    And from this height, I can see all
    I see all this summer's fall

    Submitted on 2005-11-10 16:08:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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