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Wolf Always Hunting

Author: Kane Martyr
ASL Info:    17/M/Kentucky
Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 197 /115 /16
Words: 40
Class/Type: Haiku /
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I like Haiku's, but i think they are too limiting and short, so i do them in 3's. This is kinda a running story, tell me what you think.

Wolf Always Hunting

Enter forest deep
Shadows border all around
Lost on the wolf's path

Progressing the trail
Wolfs eyes follow me along
Watching me wayward

Light through the branches
Warmth of freedom and release
Wolf returns to hunt

Submitted on 2005-11-10 16:43:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "I agree the traditional Japanese Haiku is too restrictive e.g. i sentence in 3 lines totalling 17 syllables in which the first and last have 5 sylables each and the middle 7, untitled and conventionaly about nature. You did stick to the nature theme and of coarse a title of some sort is neccessary for this web site. All in all an interesting write-Mugs-
| Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]
  Form is restricting, or maybe im just an a$$hole Your work seems so incomplete to me i get this quick shot at a scene in my mind i am overstimulated in this steriod media fed reality to have so much imagination required lol! but mad props for writting a good structured poem that would make a teacher proud.
| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Atrip187 | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you did a very good job with this series of haikus. Haikus are very challenging to write as they should contain so much in so few syllables and to put three together like this and have them tell a story is very good. Your format here is perfect and well expressed. The classification of nature here is also well done. Nothing I would suggest you change. A really well written piece this is. Take care.

| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  so, was the wolf following you for a hunt, or did the wolf just happen to be hunting near? you should make that more realizable. if thats even a word. other than that, my interpretation made it awesome and interesting, especially the flow of it. nice haiku d00d.
| Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting, i do like how you didn't follow the "rules" of the standard haiku presentation it's precious, the views of a stranger when seen by thoughs of the blind
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
  Clever, I really love wolves, they are my favorite animal. I liked the flow of your poem, it was very neat, crisp, and clean. And all-in-all it was a very good haiku. I'm not too great at haikus myself, but I'll give them a shot one of these days.
| Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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