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    dots Submission Name: The Trail At Dawndots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1096
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 559



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       By the lake at dawn one morning.

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif


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    dotsThe Trail At Dawndots
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    Observing life on the trail at dawn
    A new young buck and spotted fawn
    munching on nature's green, lush lawn

    The geese have gathered at the lake
    a gaggle about the trip south they'll take
    ooohhhh, what good down they make!

    Majestic white heron stalks some fish
    Breakfast to go ~ a tasty dish
    A bigger belly his only wish!

    In the distance a rooster crows
    Time to get up - no morning woes!
    Life in the country - the way it goes






    Submitted on 2005-11-10 17:06:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was freakin awesome! Once again, you were able to paint a clear picture in my head with what you were seeing. I love being out in the country...and this just brought me closer to that. Thanks for sharing!

    Kris
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      What a clever girl you are.

    Gaggle gaggle - many geese
    Laced with down and silken fleece
    Where they fly - no one knows
    They wave goodbye to stag and doe's

    Heron heron - has his fill
    Gullet full and aching bill
    Raises his head unto the sky
    Sees the geese all flying by

    Roster rooster on the make
    Deciding which hen he will take
    Sees the gaggle as they soar
    Pins the young hen to the floor

    The geese have flown
    The deer - they rest
    The rooster crows
    Another conquest
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice poem. I like the style and form you use here. The read itself is very cute and playful which put a smile on my face. I have to agree too, oooooh I love down! One of the best things about this damn colder weather is pulling out my enormous down comforter and throwing it on my bed. I just love it. So soft and fluffy and it is amazing how warm it is. Another wonderful nature poem. Nice! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      innocent like Graeme said.

    Again you planted these wonderful images into this midwestren mind.
    Again you make me long for things outside of this hole that I live in.


    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff, another lovely little "childish innocence" piece from you, I do like these ones, all the descriptive magic put in a way that all can enjoy.

    Excellent, sugarplum

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Like the first person said, it painted a very good image! And it was actually a peaceful poem, which surprised me! I usually don't like happy, peaceful poems...they make me depressed even more, lol. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I really like this! It paints a vivid picture of fall, leaves on the ground, and all kinds of forest animals in my mind. I thought it was a beautiful poem! I also like the way you made the ends of the lines rhyme. Very creative. I'll definitely be adding this to my favorites list!

    [megan]
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by PolaroidMemory | [ Reply to This ]


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