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didn't hurt


Author: ertha
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Once, when I was very young , about four years old, I watched a kid being bullied and wished he hadn't said ''didn't hurt''
i am unsure about this poem ...that is why i have featured it


didn't hurt



didn't hurt
said the kid
with brimming eyes
didn't hurt
said the kid
as he staggered backwards
didn't hurt
as a trickle of blood came from his lip
didn't hurt
as he felt the sting of the first betrayal
didn't hurt
as he loved without love returned
didn't hurt
as he faced his future
oh no, it didn't hurt








Submitted on 2005-11-10 18:44:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think it says alot, it goes with our natural need to deny someone the satifaction of knowing that they hurt us. Of just denying them the notion that they brought us pain.
We act strong and hold our heads up defiantly and mock them. We rebel with that statement.
It says so much:
didn't hurt
as he faced his future
oh no, it didn't hurt
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Oddly Normal | [ Reply to This ]
  Ertha,

Yea, I think we all regret saying that didn't hurt. I told my Dad that after one of his whippings. He made certain to correct the error.

I think we may need say when we are hurt. It means the ones that love us may reach out to help. If we keep it unsaid, they may never know how much we need them.

Nicely done.

Chrystine
| Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
  this is beautiful and simple, i think it speaks to so many of us...
of course it hurt. how could it not? but sometimes our pride is all we've got to hold on to.
| Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by mordantveracity | [ Reply to This ]
  i felt this one. it really hit me straight in the chest. i feel like the i AM the kid. wow. this one is really good. i wish i could've captured all that hurt the way you did.

fabulous job
keep it up.
i shall be reading all your work
| Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by hayl | [ Reply to This ]
  Thats so sad. Beautiful though. The descriptions are excellent, I could definitely feel it. My favorite line (which I also think it the saddest) is, "as he loved without love returned." I dont even know what else to say. Very powerful. Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  Another close to home one...

Me and my brother had constant bully problems in elementary school. I got my ass kicked more times then I care to confess. It lingers, the outcast persona. It makes you cynical and distant.

I like the word play and the repitition in the form. It sets up the for a knock out blow. But that is what is wanting. Have a look at Drift Wood. I think that kind of break would work really well here. And give you a forum to say it powerfully.
| Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by Car va g o | [ Reply to This ]
  Don't think I should be reviewing this one...

but I will.

I does hurt.

"as he loved without love returned
didn't hurt
as he faced his future
oh no, it didn't hurt"

I'd change that last line to "it did hurt"
and it hurt
always
every moment
of every day
for the rest of his life.

but what would I know.....

(told you I shouldn't be reviewing this one)
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by glasshill | [ Reply to This ]


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