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Passing time


Author: Sundance
ASL Info:    20/F
Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 15 /32 /11
Words: 33
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I wrote this one in my English class. I was reading ancient Japanese haikus and realized the genius of the short poem. So thats what inspired this.


Passing time



Petals turn on a flower,
day moves from gold
to red.
my strands turn silver
while watching life
and passing time.




Submitted on 2005-11-10 19:47:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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