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    dots Submission Name: Slipdots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 760
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 736



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       I wrote this after coming back from my first poetry slam. That was cool. I love my Kaela lol


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

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    Let me go from here, let me show you who's in here, my heart, please.

    After this, you can just let me slip under your radar, sand between your fingertips, let your time with me run out, but the hourglass will never again flip.

    You're going to wish you could take me back. After the six months you put me through. My first love, I'll always remember, how the days do blur.

    A mix of gold and greens and reds, of tones we do not know. A blend of promises, lies, and truth, and people who want to be fixed.

    I'm one of these, all of these, and this poem might not make sense. But to me, it's me, and what I have, is worth blank dollars and priceless cents.




    Submitted on 2005-11-10 21:43:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it.. is worth blank dollars and priceless cents is one of my favorite parts.. it kind of reminds me of a song i heard once but i dont remember what song.. bummer. its a good piece..
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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